The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The charts illustrate the amount of
world
energy
usage and electricity production in the previous year.
Overall
, Coal has the largest percentage of
world
electrical generation at present but the power consumption is dominated by oil.
Moreover
, people
also
use renewable
energy
such
as combustible renewables and waste. Looking at the details, one-third of people in the
world
depend on oil for electrical sources. Followed by consumption of Coal and Gas around 25% and 20% respectively. Interestingly, there was
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energy
that is
not produced in the
world
which combustible renewables and waste at 10%.
Then
, the remaining total
of
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power consumption around 9% distributed by nuclear ,hydro and the others 6.5% , 2.2% ,and 1.4% respectively.
Energy
production was dominated by coal around 40%. There are three sources that have no significant gap between them ,Gas, Hydro and Nuclear which is 19%,16% and 15% respectively.
In addition
, Oil has less production approximately 6% .
Lastly
, others
energy
the smallest amount of electricity generation about 2%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words world, energy with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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