TOPIC: In recent years, the family structure and the role of its members are gradually changing. What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive and negative?
Technology
disrupt
our society in many ways. The family Change the verb form
disrupts
structure
is not an exception. Family
is a group of people connected by marriage or bloodline sharing Change the article
A family
a
same household. Correct article usage
the
This
essay will discuss how the family structure
and the role of its members
has changed over time and its consequences.
Technology has brought people together since the introduction of high-speed internet. Family members
can keep in touch despite notable to meet
face-to-face. The ability to connect without being in the same location has opened Verb problem
not meeting
endles
Correct your spelling
endless
possiblity
for Correct your spelling
possibility
ones
to pursue their dreams. Different generations tend to live apart Fix the agreement mistake
one
due to
different needs. The trend of family structure
has shifted from extended
family where multiple generations live together to Add an article
an extended
the
single family. Family Correct article usage
a
members
often find themselves to have more-active
roles Correct your spelling
more active
due to
less
transportation Correct quantifier usage
fewer
limitation
. Fix the agreement mistake
limitations
Family
will gradually have Add an article
The family
less
Change the quantifier
fewer
members
in the future. However
, each single family will be more effective and more agile.
Not all the disruptions are positive ones. The economic recession is happening in every corner of the world these days due to
the geopolitical challenge. It is said to be the greatest and the longest recession ever--predicted to be longer than the great depression in 1930. Couples working two jobs cannot make ends meet. These led to the decision not to have kids in vast
majority of couples. DINK, abbreviated "Double Income No Add an article
the vast
kids
", is a growing Capitalize word
Kids
trends
in young couples. Not only family are getting smaller from generations living apart, but Change the noun form
trend
also
the lacks
of Fix the agreement mistake
lack
new
generation. Add an article
a new
the new
Although
these might benefit the family as a unit, it
might deteriorate our society as a whole as we will have less human capital in the near future.
One could not stop the world from spinning forward, same rules apply Correct pronoun usage
they
with
the family Change preposition
to
structure
. There are both positive and negative effects of technological disruption to
the way Change preposition
on
famillies
work. Correct your spelling
families
However
, both leads
to smaller and more solitary families.Change the verb form
lead
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In your introduction, clearly state what changes to the family structure are to be discussed and give a brief overview of your position regarding whether these changes are positive or negative.
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