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The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.

The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie charts
illustrates
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 the proportions of British
students
in particular
university
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universities
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 in England who have the ability to speak foreign languages
besides
 English in 10 years from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that the most popular
language
 that the pupils can speak is
Spanish
 both in 2000 and 2010. The capability to speak
spanish
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Spanish
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 and another
language
 slightly increased,
otherwise
 there is some decrease in no other
languange
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language
 and speaking in
french
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French
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. The
two
 biggest proportions in 2000 are the number of
students
 that
additionally
 were able to communicate in
Spanish
 only and no other
language
, with 30 and 20 respectively.
However
,
although
Spanish
 only grew its numbers to 35, no other
language
 experienced a notable decline to half.
Furthermore
, in 2000, 15
students
 each were bilingual in French only and another
language
. In 2010, French only increased by 5,
on the contrary
, the number of
students
 able to speak another
language
 decreased by the same amount. The remaining
two
 had 10
students
 each who were capable of speaking German only and
two
 other languages. Over the course of 10 years, the ability to speak German only and
two
 other languages remained in proportion.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • proficiency
  • linguistic diversity
  • polyglot
  • language acquisition
  • second language (L2)
  • foreign language
  • fluency
  • working knowledge
  • mother tongue
  • language competence
  • language decline
  • cultural exchange
  • global language
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