The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.

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of reading activity based on books in comparisons by gender
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in the
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between 2011 and 2014 at Burnaby Public Library.
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of the books read
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which is the range of
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always increasing time after time. And the higher
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of male visitors in 2014 with 14000.
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, it
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in 2013 with 10000 visitors. In
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of books read
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,
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start
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in 2011 has 5000
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only
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3000. In 2012, those
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occur
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with 8000 for
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and 4000 for
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. In
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2013, rising up rapidly
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by 10000, which
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accrued as many as 6000 and
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stable for
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.
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with 5000 and still
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twofold for
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with 14000. In conclusion, there is fluctuated occur for
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in 4 years, specifically in the
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2 years.
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number
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until the
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