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The charts below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.

The charts below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
#information #transport #car #edmonton
The pie chart and table below give information on
transport
 and
car
 use in Edmonton.
Overall
 the table provides information about people’s reasons for using
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
car
Fix the agreement mistake
cars
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 in
city
Add an article
the city
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,
while
 the pie chart
indicating
Wrong verb form
indicates
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 whether
transport
using
Wrong verb form
is used
show examples
 in
city
Add an article
the city
show examples
. As can
be see
Change the verb form
be seen
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 from the table,the place and per
cent
 of
this
 place how popular are among people.
For example
 the majority(55 per
cent
) of
human
Fix the agreement mistake
humans
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 use
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
car
 to commute to work. But a tiny minority(fifteen) use the
car
to
Change preposition
for
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 leisure activities.
However
 ,in pie chart
shown
Wrong verb form
shows
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 per
cent
 of
transport
.
For
example
Add a comma
example,
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 taxi and bus similar per
cent
 both of
this
Correct determiner usage
these
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transport
 makes up 20
percentage
Replace the word
per cent
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.
By contrast
Add a comma
,
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car
 makes up
nearly-half
Correct your spelling
nearly half
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 per
cent
. The LRT dream up a
thirty five
Add a hyphen
thirty-five
show examples
 per
cent
. As we saw the two tips of information
similar
Add a missing verb
are similar
show examples
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "for example".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, car, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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