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Band 5.5

The charts below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.

The charts below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
#information #transport #car #edmonton
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The pie chart and table below give information on
transport
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 and
car
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 use in Edmonton.
Overall
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 the table provides information about people’s reasons for using
the
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apply
show examples
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car
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cars
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 in
city
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the city
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,
while
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 the pie chart
indicating
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indicates
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 whether
transport
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using
Wrong verb form
is used
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 in
city
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the city
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. As can
be see
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be seen
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 from the table,the place and per
cent
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 of
this
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 place how popular are among people.
For example
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 the majority(55 per
cent
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) of
human
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humans
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 use
the
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a
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car
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 to commute to work. But a tiny minority(fifteen) use the
car
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to
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for
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 leisure activities.
However
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 ,in pie chart
shown
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shows
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 per
cent
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 of
transport
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.
For
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example
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example,
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 taxi and bus similar per
cent
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 both of
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this
Correct determiner usage
these
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transport
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 makes up 20
percentage
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per cent
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.
By contrast
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,
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car
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 makes up
nearly-half
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nearly half
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 per
cent
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. The LRT dream up a
thirty five
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thirty-five
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 per
cent
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. As we saw the two tips of information
similar
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are similar
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "for example".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, car, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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