The chart below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. 
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.


Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph tells us information regarding the number of
population
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that live in cities as a percentage of the whole
population
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in four Asian countries namely, Indonesia, Malaysia, Thailand, and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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over a 60-year period towards 2020, with projections for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, the four countries oversaw a steady
increase
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in urban
population
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percentage from 1970 to 2020 and the numbers are projected to be slightly increasing in the two decades after. Both Malaysia and Indonesia
,
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seems
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seem
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to be experiencing
drastic
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a drastic
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increase
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increases
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in urban
population
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as a percentage from the start of the charts towards
the
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apply
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2010
while
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afterwards the
increase
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are experiencing
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experienced
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a slowdown. Meanwhile,
Philppines
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Philippines
oversaw a drastic
increase
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of 20% in
the
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1990 before experiencing a decline of 10% following 1990 up until
2010s
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the 2010s
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and will be projected to a steady
increase
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in following 2020.
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Whereas
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apply
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Thailand
is
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has
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experiencing
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experienced
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a
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apply
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stagnation from the decades of 1990s up until
2010s
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the 2010s
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and is projected to
increase
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drastically in
2030s
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the 2030s
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and 2040s.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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