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The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009 in Japan, the USA and other countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009 in Japan, the USA and other countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant. Write at least 150 words.
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The column chart
illustrated
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 the stocks of
transportations
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transportation
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 that consume power resources to generate all over the world in the period of 2006 to 2009.
According to
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 the chart, in the
year
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of
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apply
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2006, except
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for
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The United
State
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States
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,
Japan
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 and the other nations had
the
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a
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dupplicate
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duplicate
in
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amount
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the amount
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 of
trades
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trade
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. These factors held nearly the lowest number with the figure of just higher than 50,000 a little bit. After 2 years, the
selling
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 of these countries slightly
increase
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increased
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,
Japan
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 approximately
reach
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 100,000 in
sales
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, and the
sellings
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selling
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 of the other countries
were surpass
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 100,000 in
sales
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 in the same
year
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.
However
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,
Japan
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 uplifted
rocketly
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rocket
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rocketry
 when the
amount
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number
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 of
sales
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 demonstrated by
chart
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the chart
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 was over 300,000 and
archieved
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achieved
archived
 its whopping in the
year
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of
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2009.
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, at the same time, the growth rate in
sales
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 of the other countries was moderate, the figure
of
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just overtook 100,000.
Besides
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 that, America was
the-all-time-high
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 in the amount of stocks. More than 250,000 up to 350,000 in
sales
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 in two years started
from
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in
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 2006 and ended in 2007.
Subsequently
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, The United
State
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States
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 made a peak
whereas
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 the trade of
this
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 country kept declining until 2009. From 350,000 in the mentioned
year
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 to under 300,000 in the
year
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 of 2009.
Nonetheless
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,
this
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 nation
still
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 the second region
held
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that held
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 the highest number
in
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of
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sales
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 after
Japan
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, japan, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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