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Consumer goods have become the most important of people's lives. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is a common belief that the most significant aspect of
people
’s
lives
 is their
consumer
goods
. In
this
 essay, I will both discuss the
merit
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merits
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 and demerits of
this
 phenomenon and try to explore why
people
 rely on these items. On the one hand, there are various reasons that
people
 are counting on the
consumer
 to live their
lives
.
Firstly
,
people
 cannot live without the
consumer
goods
 which are so convenient for them.
This
 is because these
goods
 are all around
people
’s
lives
. To be more specific, a cell phone can do a lot for a person.
For example
, in the modern era,
people
 choose to send an Email
instead
 of sending a letter to their relatives overseas.
Consequently
,
people
 are more likely to choose an easy way to satisfy their
lives
. Another advantage of counting on
consumer
goods
 is the prices of them.
In other words
, companies can easily make more products to reduce the price of
goods
.
For example
, some fast fashion companies announce new
clothes
this
 month and probably reduce the price next month.
As a result
,
people
 will keep buying the
clothes
 when they are cheaper.
On the other hand
, the demerits of
consumer
goods
 and their cost cannot be ignored.
To begin
 with, too
much
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consumer
goods
such
 as fast fashion
clothes
 can affect the environment.
This
 is
due to
 the fact that a little pollution can be created in the production process.
For instance
, there would be water pollution when they dye their
clothes
 in different colours.
To
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 conclusion,
although
 there
a
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is a
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disadvantage
for
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to
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an
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the
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 environment, it is
deniable
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undeniable
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 that
people
 in
this
 century cannot live without the convenience that
consumer
goods
 bring us.
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Introduction
Ensure that the introduction clearly presents the topic and outlines the main points that will be discussed. Avoid generic statements and try to craft an introduction that sets a clear agenda for the essay.
Conclusion
Develop the concluding paragraph to effectively summarize the main arguments presented in the essay. Restate the thesis and the main points without introducing new information.
Cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices to link ideas and paragraphs more effectively. This could include using synonyms to avoid repetition, and transition words to show the relationship between ideas.
Paragraph Structure
Organize the essay into clear paragraphs, each with a single main idea supported by specific examples. This helps give structure to the essay and guides the reader through your arguments.
Task Response
Address all parts of the prompt by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of consumer goods in detail. Ensure that your response is balanced and addresses the question of whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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