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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, canned
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 have increased in popularity and have almost replaced homemade
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. It seems to me that modern life in many developing countries leads to increased consumption of fast
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instead
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 of traditional
food
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. The first reason, canned
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 replace traditional
foods
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 because of their lower cost. Because convenience
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 are provided in factories. Their ingredients are cheaper than buying traditional
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 ingredients.
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, canned fish is prepared at a lower cost and faster than cooking fish at home. The second reason and
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 the most important factor affecting the choice of canned
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 is
time
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. Because many people work longer hours during the day in progressive communities.
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, they do not have enough
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 to cook when they return home.
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, they prefer to provide fast
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instead
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 of traditional
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.
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, canned goods come in interesting containers.
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, they are beautifully designed in factories making them more attractive to consumers, leading to more buying them rather than spending
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 cooking home-cooked
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.In short, canned
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 costs less and requires less preparation
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, so it is more popular.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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