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The spread of a ‘global language’ such as English will threaten national languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It can be seen an increase in
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language
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world
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.Some argue that
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English
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spread
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the spread
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 of
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 throughout the
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 will be a treat for other native
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 because nowadays
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 is an internationally recognised
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 and governments invest
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on
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 education at schools.
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, as we are in the modern
world
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,
English
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 has become invaluable and considered as a
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world recognised
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language
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English
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 been increasing over the years and most
of
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the
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people in the
world
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 get involved in communication in
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 between different nations.
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, it is accepted as
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language
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, If two
government
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 need to sign an agreement
between
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eachother
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each other
 for
funds
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 or any other transaction, the documents of the agreements are written in
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due to
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 is the most
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convenient
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, many governments invest
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for
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 teaching
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for
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 students at
their
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 young age.
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English
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 is an internationally recognised
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 and governments encourage students and people to master
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 to address the future challenges in technology. It can
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 that
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developmnet
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development
 of technology
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 affect people negatively if they
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 not master
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atleast
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at least
 at
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 level.
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South Asian nations like Bangladesh, Sri Lanka, and India invest more
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 to
rise
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raise
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 teaching quality of
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 education.
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, these consequences and steps would adversely
affect
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 local
languages
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 to
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disappear
 in the future as in
increase
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an increase
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 in
usage
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 of
this
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language
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 at young ages. In conclusion, I
agrees
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agree
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 with proponents who argue that
English
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 will be a
treat
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threat
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on
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to
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 national
language
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 because it
already
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 a
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world recognised
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language
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 and most
of
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governmnets
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governments
government
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such
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 as agreements.
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, Government spending on improving education in learning
English
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 for students at
their
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 early
ages
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 would gradually but surely
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disappear
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languages
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.

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task achievement
To improve your essay, attempt to enhance the clarity of your introduction. It is advisable to directly address the essay prompt and clearly state your position in the opening paragraph. A thesis statement that previews the main points can also provide a roadmap for the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Increase the range of sentence structures and incorporate a variety of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of ideas. This will add sophistication to your writing and help in achieving better coherence.
task achievement
In the body paragraphs, ensure that the main points are developed with detailed and specific examples. Extend your arguments with rich illustration to effectively support your stance, which can demonstrate a better task response.
coherence and cohesion
To enhance cohesion, create topic sentences that clearly outline the content of each paragraph and ensure each sentence builds logically from the previous one.
task achievement
For the conclusion, provide a definitive summary of the essay's main points and restate your position. This establishes a clear ending to your argument and resonates with the reader.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • lingua franca
  • international communication
  • erode
  • linguistic diversity
  • transmitted
  • cultural identity
  • heritage
  • diluted
  • dominant
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language policies
  • real-time translation
  • technological advancements
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