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The line graph below shows the household recycling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the household recycling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph gives information about the Regional household recycling ratio in three European countries over
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 age of 10
years
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 from 2005 to 2015.
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, It can be seen that the percentage of household recycling in the UK and Germany showed an Upward trend,
While
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 France showed a downward trend throughout the duration except the
last
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two
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years
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.
To begin
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 with, The rate of household recycling in the
Uk
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UK
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 was around 35 per
cent
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 in 2005, and it will still increase for the next
two
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years
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, In 2009 it jumped about 50 per
cent
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 and
at the end
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 of the period, it was around 60 per
cent
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 in 2015. As for Germany in 2005 it was around 20 percent.
Subsequently
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, It increased dramatically to 40% in 2011 and still increased for the next
two
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years
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 around 58 percent in 2015.
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, France had the highest rate in the beginning, around 50 per
cent
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 in 2005.
Subsequently
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, it plunged to 30 per
cent
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 in the next 8
years
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,
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2013 there was a fluctuation in the ratio and showed an upward trend for the next
two
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years
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 around 40 per
cent
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.
Furthermore
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, that means France had the lowest percentage
at the end
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 of the course.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, subsequently".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, two, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
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