The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the united kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

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carbon

dioxide

emissions

per person in 4

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countries for the years 1967 and 2007.

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co2

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CO2

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emissions

in Portugal rose dramatically but

carbon

dioxide

emission in

Sweden

has

fall

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over the period shown. In 1967,

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the united

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united kingdom

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United Kingdom

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was the

most

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producer

carbon

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of carbon

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dioxide

per person over 10 metric

tonnes

while

Portugal

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a negligible amount of

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dioxide

Sweden

produce

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much more

carbon

dioxide

than Italy, about 8 and 4 metric

tonnes

respectively. United

kingdom

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saw only a small fall in

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dioxide

emissions

over a period of 40 years,

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Portugal rose dramatically from 1.5 metric

tonnes

in 1967 to 5.8 metric

tonnes

in 2007. Between 1967 and 1977

co2

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CO2

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emissions

rose in Italy and

Sweden

and reached 6 and 10 metric

tonnes

respectively, after that

co2

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CO2

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emissions

fall

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dramatically

about

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5 metric

tonnes

Sweden

but in Italy it rose

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8 metric

tonnes

in 1997 and

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this

level for the rest of the period.

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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the united kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to study fit. Others think there are more effective methods. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that success in life comes from hard working and determination, while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The two-floor plans show the renovation of AAA Accountancy's main office.

Some people believe that a natural ability is needed to be successful at sport, others believe that hardwork and discipline is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Use relevant ideas and examples

A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?