The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the united kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the united kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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per person in 4
european
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countries for the years 1967 and 2007.
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co2
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CO2
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emissions
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in Portugal rose dramatically but
carbon
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dioxide
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emission in
Sweden
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has
fall
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over the period shown. In 1967,
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the united
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united kingdom
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United Kingdom
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was the
most
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producer
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carbon
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of carbon
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dioxide
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per person over 10 metric
tonnes
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,
while
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Portugal
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a negligible amount of
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dioxide
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.
Sweden
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produce
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much more
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dioxide
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than Italy, about 8 and 4 metric
tonnes
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respectively. United
kingdom
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saw only a small fall in
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dioxide
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emissions
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over a period of 40 years,
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contrast
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Portugal rose dramatically from 1.5 metric
tonnes
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in 1967 to 5.8 metric
tonnes
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in 2007. Between 1967 and 1977
co2
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CO2
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emissions
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rose in Italy and
Sweden
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and reached 6 and 10 metric
tonnes
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respectively, after that
co2
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CO2
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emissions
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fall
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dramatically
about
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5 metric
tonnes
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in
Sweden
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but in Italy it rose
about
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8 metric
tonnes
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in 1997 and
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at
this
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level for the rest of the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, emissions, sweden, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 3 times.
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