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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The two tables provide information about fair
trade
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-labelled product sales,
such
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 as
coffee
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 and
bananas
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, between 1999 and 2004 in the UK, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden.
Moreover
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, the data is provided in millions of
euros
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the fair
trade
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 for
bananas
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 showed a more significant amount of money rather than
coffee
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. From the first table, the noticeable increase came from the UK. In 1999, the sales of
coffee
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 were only 1.5
million
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euros
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.
However
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, it had a dramatic increase, and in 2004, it generated around 13 times more than before, 20
million
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euros
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.
In contrast
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, fair
trade
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 for
coffee
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 made only a slight decrease in Switzerland and Sweden as it only increased by 0.2
million
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euros
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.
Overall
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, the fair
trade
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 increased between 1999 and 2004 for
coffee
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 in all 5 countries. For
bananas
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, it can be seen that, in 1999, especially in Switzerland, the fair
trade
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 of
bananas
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 made money up to 15
million
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euros
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.
This
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 amount was far more considerable than the fair
trade
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 for
coffee
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 at that time.
Initially
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,
bananas
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 generated 2
million
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euros
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 in Denmark.
However
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, by the end of the given period, there was a moderate decrease as it only generated 0.9
million
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euros
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, bananas, euros, trade, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade labelled
  • significant increase/decrease
  • consumer awareness
  • sustainable growth
  • ethical consumerism
  • market trends
  • dominant market
  • comparative analysis
  • socio-economic impact
  • market penetration
  • exponential growth
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