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Many things that used to be done in home by hands are now being done by machines . Does it bring advantages or disadvantages?

#home #hands #machines
The technology of automation has infiltrated almost every business in the world, substituting manpower by streamlining processes and making them substantially faster with
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 discrepancies. I personally hold the view that the existing pace of automation of
labour-orianted
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 processes at home exhibits strengths only.
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 salient advantage of having automated processes is the enhanced efficiency. I believe
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 a majority of the food we consume should better be prepared with
machines
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with rising market demand.
For instance
,
people
 used to produce their own
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, resulting in a lot of clean-up and
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.
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, they can now purchase or even order
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pastas
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 from the nearest grocery stores at a
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considerably
 cheaper price.
Additionally
, the pharmaceutical industry has undergone a massive improvement after the application of automated equipment in the production lines, sky
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 the produced medicine volumes which used to be part of a
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 solution.
Moreover
, as of now, a big portion of the daily household jobs that
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 done by
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 were replaced with modern and comprehensive machinery, saving them time and resources. To illustrate, in the past,
people
 used to hand wash dishes,
whereas
 now they have dishwashing
machines
 that can clean far more efficiently than a human could manage.
Furthermore
, the invention of vacuum
machines
 has compelled
people
 to gravitate towards embracing technology rather than
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 it. In conclusion, despite some
people
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technology as
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 enemy that wants to relegate humanity, I
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believe
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 the help of these upgraded
machines
 humanity can make life easier for
people
 to designate time for more prioritized tasks.
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Ensure to address both advantages and disadvantages to fully respond to the prompt, as the question asks you to discuss both.
coherence and cohesion
Use a range of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of your essay and signal relationships between ideas.
coherence and cohesion
A clear thesis statement in the introduction could strengthen the position and provide a roadmap for the reader.
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Introduce a counter-argument or a disadvantage to balance your essay and show analytical thinking.
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Expand your conclusion to summarise both sides of the argument, even if your position leans towards one side.
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Offer specific examples to support your arguments, which strengthens the effectiveness of your points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automation
  • domestic help
  • smart home technologies
  • energy-efficient
  • resource depletion
  • over-dependence
  • external services
  • maintenance
  • replacements
  • leisure activities
  • tedious tasks
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