Task 1 The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1 The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The
given
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diagram illustrates how
manufacture
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manufactured
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bricks
are used for
building
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the building
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industry. As can be inferred from the diagram, there are seven steps beginning with digging clay from underground and finishing with
delivery
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the delivery
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bricks
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of bricks
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.
Firstly
, a digger is used to dig clay from underground. The clay
then
is filtered by a metal grid and put onto a roller to add sand and water. After that, the mixture is shaped by two methods: wire cutter or mould. Those formed
bricks
are arranged neatly and transported into a drying oven for drying in 24 - 48 hours to prepare for the next steps. The
forth
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fourth
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step is putting
bricks
into a machinery system for
heated
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heat
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. At
first,
the kiln
heat
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heated
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bricks
with
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at
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moderate
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a moderate
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temperature
at
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of
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200 C - 980 C.
Next,
the temperature
increase
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to
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from
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870oC to 1300oC,
then
the
brickis
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bricks
brick is
are moved into a cooling chamber in two to three days. After that, those ready-to-use
bricks
are packaged, put on a truck for delivery and
finish
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finished
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the process.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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