Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education and that goverments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
most people think
to take
higher Change the verb form
taking
education
is important for all student
especially Fix the agreement mistake
students
students
with financial problem
, the Fix the agreement mistake
problems
government
also
should make regulation
Fix the agreement mistake
regulations
for
Change preposition
apply
the
youth from Correct determiner usage
that
middle lower
income Correct word choice
apply
family
have access to Fix the agreement mistake
families
university
. In this
essay
I agree Add a comma
essay,
with
all Change preposition
that
student
can get access to Fix the agreement mistake
students
university
. However
, students
with good economic background should pay for it.
To Begin
with, the
country Correct article usage
a
who
Correct pronoun usage
that
producing
many graduates can be considered Wrong verb form
produces
as
developed country Correct your spelling
a
such
as United
Correct article usage
the United
Stated
and Correct your spelling
States
United
Kingdom. All Correct article usage
the United
students
can get the oppotunity
to enrolling Correct your spelling
opportunity
university
without worries to pay
their Change preposition
about paying
education
bills, in this
situation government
in
charge Add a missing verb
is in
with
providing regulation and Change preposition
of
budget
to support Correct article usage
a budget
students
with financial issue
. Fix the agreement mistake
issues
For instance
, in Indonesia
we have scholarships that we Add a comma
Indonesia,
called
"BIDIK MISI" which Wrong verb form
call
is
youth citizens provided living Correct subject-verb agreement
are
cost
and free Fix the agreement mistake
costs
university
education
cost
.
Fix the agreement mistake
costs
In
the other hand, Change preposition
On
Student
from rich
Add an article
the rich
family
should Fix the agreement mistake
families
pays
Change the verb form
pay
their
Change preposition
for their
education
because the university
also
have
cost to enhance their Change the verb form
has
education
facilities and service such
as convenient classroom
, proper practical Fix the agreement mistake
classrooms
laboratory
, Fix the agreement mistake
laboratories
library
, and so on. Fix the agreement mistake
libraries
However
, student
should have Fix the agreement mistake
students
assessment
to find out the ability of Add an article
an assessment
student
Fix the agreement mistake
students
family
to their Fix the agreement mistake
families
education
costs, we
do not burden their family Correct word choice
so we
for
Change preposition
with
that
costs. Correct determiner usage
those
therefore
, government
makes fair regulations for all citizens.
In conclusion, all Add an article
the government
student
from all financial Fix the agreement mistake
students
background
have access to Fix the agreement mistake
backgrounds
educations
and Fix the agreement mistake
education
government
should gives
scholarships Change the verb form
give
for
Change preposition
to
student
with financial Fix the agreement mistake
students
issue
Fix the agreement mistake
issues
while
student
with good economic conditions should pay their education
costs without burdens their
family.Change preposition
on their
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