In some societies, more and more people are deciding to live alone.
Why do you think this is? Do the advantages of living alone outweigh the disadvantages?
of individuals choosing to live alone is particularly noticeable in urban areas and developed countries. There
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to building a family for many reasons. First of all, economic factors. The
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introduction
The essay introduction is incomplete and does not fully address the prompt. Please ensure that your introduction sets the context for the essay and presents a clear thesis statement addressing why people choose to live alone and whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
coherence
Ensure that your essay has a logical flow of ideas. Each paragraph should have a clear main topic and the ideas should be organized in a way that each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next, leading towards a coherent conclusion.
supporting points
Provide adequate support for your main points by using relevant examples and explanations. Each assertion should be followed by an explanation or example to strengthen your argument.
task response
Your essay must address both aspects of the prompt fully - reasons for living alone and an argument discussing if the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Remember to cover all parts of the prompt to achieve a higher score in task achievement.
grammar & spelling
The essay contains several grammatical errors and misspellings. Please review and correct errors to enhance the clarity and professionalism of your writing. Aim for accurate spelling, verb forms, and sentence structure.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
Certain people believe that multinational companies are becoming more common in advance countries, because these companies provide pure and certified products from the relevant government. It is also a good opportunity to provide same product on same prices in many countries. Multinational companies badly effect the local market and their product of the concerned country.
With the development of electronic technology, individuals can live a more comfortable life than ever. It is widely accepted that everyone uses smartphones in their daily lives, and most teenagers also have smartphones. This phenomenon has several advantages and disadvantages, and I think the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
Lately, a plethora of topics are being seriously talked about among various individuals and groups, and one prominent topic is funds. There are even groups or official organizations that invest a lot of money to preserve the habitats of animals, while others argue those funds should be spent to deal with basic issues. I strongly agree that people and groups cost money to protect the environment. In the succeeding paragraphs, I am going to discuss perspective further.
Nowadays, worldwide health department has been focusing on the increasing number of obese people. Although the majority of individuals believe that an ideal solution to overcome this situation is by implementing more physical training in school, I would argue that this is not the only way.
It is argued that some students struggle with different courses like math and philosophy, so they think it is better to make these subjects optional rather than compulsory. This essay completely disagrees with that statement because science subjects and philosophy are important for the brain's development, and these subjects are essential in our daily life.