In some societies, more and more people are deciding to live alone. Why do you think this is? Do the advantages of living alone outweigh the disadvantages?

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of individuals choosing to live alone is particularly noticeable in urban areas and developed countries. There
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cultural
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shift from people
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solitary living
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to building a family for many reasons. First of all, economic factors. The
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ability to support
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and easier compared
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a family.
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introduction
The essay introduction is incomplete and does not fully address the prompt. Please ensure that your introduction sets the context for the essay and presents a clear thesis statement addressing why people choose to live alone and whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
coherence
Ensure that your essay has a logical flow of ideas. Each paragraph should have a clear main topic and the ideas should be organized in a way that each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next, leading towards a coherent conclusion.
supporting points
Provide adequate support for your main points by using relevant examples and explanations. Each assertion should be followed by an explanation or example to strengthen your argument.
task response
Your essay must address both aspects of the prompt fully - reasons for living alone and an argument discussing if the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Remember to cover all parts of the prompt to achieve a higher score in task achievement.
grammar & spelling
The essay contains several grammatical errors and misspellings. Please review and correct errors to enhance the clarity and professionalism of your writing. Aim for accurate spelling, verb forms, and sentence structure.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • individualism
  • solitude
  • self-sufficiency
  • empowerment
  • autonomy
  • loneliness
  • mental well-being
  • financial independence
  • social isolation
  • personal growth
  • economic strain
  • urbanization
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