The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart below demonstrates the
amount
of books Change the quantifier
number
are
read by males and females at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 until 2014.
Unnecessary verb
apply
Overall
, the number of men increased , while
the women reader
dropped.
Fix the agreement mistake
readers
Girls
count started Correct article usage
The girls
with
nearly 5,000 in 2011 and kept Change preposition
at
in
steadily increasing way and reached 8,000 in the next year , and stay rising until 2013 to the highest number of Change preposition
apply
females
readers which it is ten-thousand, Change the noun form
female
while
after that the dropping is begin
Change the verb form
is begun
is beginning
finally
with lower than 8,000 readers.
On the other side
the men began with lower than 4,000 , but after that the reader of men rose to six-thousand in the middle between 2012 and 2013 and it is never failed or dropped as girls in the opposite it Add a comma
side,
is get
over females by exactly 4,000 of boys that reading books and it is the highest number in the whole chart from both genders.Change the verb form
gets
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