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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
The
three
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 pie charts provide information about
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the
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proportion
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 of annual
expenditure
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 in a UK school in
three
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 different
years
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, (1981, 1991, and 2001)
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the highest amount of money was spent on teachers’ salaries in all
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,
while
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 insurance received the smallest
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.
It is clear that
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 the vast majority of the total
expenditure
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 was allocated to teachers' salaries in all
three
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years
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, accounting for 40%, 50%, and 45% of total spending respectively. The school spent
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the
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 second largest
proportion
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 of its
expenditure
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 on other workers’ salaries in both 1981 and 1991, at 28% and 22% respectively.
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,
this
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proportion
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 decreased to only 15% in 2001.
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 spending on furniture and equipment decreased from 15% to 5% between 1981 and 1991, it increased by almost a quarter in 2001. In 1981, 15% of the school's
expenditure
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 was on resources, which increased slightly in 1991 and dropped to 9% in 2001.
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, insurance received the smallest share of the
expenditure
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 in all
three
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years
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, at 2%, 3%, and 8%, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, it is clear that, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, proportion, expenditure, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • educational expenditure
  • financial management
  • infrastructure investment
  • evolution of costs
  • annual spending
  • strategic funding
  • capital outlay
  • operational costs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal trends
  • cost analysis
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