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Nowadays, people are using internet for getting information on goods and services. What do you think are advantages overweight disadvantages?

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Introduction
modern dwellers
closely
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are closely
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 connected
with
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to
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 the
internet
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 for distinctive
couses
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causes
courses
. The more expenses people
purches
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purchases
purchase
 the more
internet
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 is used.
Body paragraph 1
There are both
posistive
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positive
 and
negatuve
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negative
 sides
of
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to
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this
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 process.
Body paragraph 2
The following essay will discuss
advantages
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the advantages
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 and
dissadvanteges
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disadvantages
 of being a
frequently
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frequent
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internet
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 user.
Body paragraph 3
On the one hand there
various
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are various
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 remits of online shopping.
Body paragraph 4
First,
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online shopping is
beneficial
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a beneficial
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 instrument for saving time.
Internet
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buiers
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buyers
 have
an
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apply
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acces
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access
 to getting the goods and products they without time-consuming efforts.
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 time they have
economize
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economised
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can be used more beneficially for more
valueble
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valuable
 things like doing
sport
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sports
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 and reading books.
Body paragraph 5
Second, Residents constantly ordering goods online
notisabely
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noticeably
 decrease
emission
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emissions
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 by
encresing
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increasing
 traffics. As a
qonsequense
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consequence
 air will be
more
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apply
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fresher.
Conclusion
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task achievement
It is essential to complete the essay to provide a full response to the prompt. You must also include a conclusion to summarise and restate your main points.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea, and use cohesive devices such as transition words to ensure the essay flows logically.
task achievement
Support your main points with clear and specific examples. For instance, instead of broadly stating that online shopping saves time, provide a concrete example of how this works, such as the ability to compare prices quickly or the elimination of travel time to physical stores.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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