The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the proportion of citizens living in cities of four countries

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are Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia for the time period of five years between 1970 and 2020,

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with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

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it is clear that

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the population grew in the cities throughout the time period,

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, Malaysia and Indonesia

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expected to have the highest

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per square

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by the end of 2040.

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with, Malaysia started at 30% with a gradual growth till 1990,

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the percentage rose rapidly till 2020 and is expected to rise

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till 2040,

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, Indonesia started with least percentage with just

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15% but the population sky rocketed after 2000 and currently stays at second place with 50% and is predicted to grow

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by the end of the time period. Moving on, even though

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the Philippines

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was highest in 1970 with just over 30% there was a significant drop for

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of years from 1990 and 2010

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and is expected to be just near 50% by 2040. There was not much

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in Thailand as its population gradually increased and doubled by the end.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Asian countries
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