smoking is a major cause of serious illness and death throughout the wprld today. In the interest of the public health, governments should ban cigarettes and other tobacco products. Do you agree or disagree?

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majority
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of
people
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are died
due to
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over
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douse and
use
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the use

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of
drugs
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in their normal routine,
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however
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to overcome
this
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goverment
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government

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have
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takes
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strict action against it like
reduce
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the supply of
product
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products

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and
organization
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organising

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the
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an

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awareness campaign. I completely disagree with
this
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idea and
following
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the following

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essay will support my opinion
along
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apply

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.
Firstly
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, if law
maker's
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makers
maker

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dropped
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drop

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or ban the supply of
drugs
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then
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it
become
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becomes

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difficult
of
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for

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drugers
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drugs

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to survive,
hence
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, they may depend upon
another
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another drug
other drugs

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drugs
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like drinks
that is
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why
government
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the government

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have to provide
the
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apply

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awareness seminar in which they guides the
individual
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individuals

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about the harmful effects of cigarettes and other
tobacco
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, so that
people
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reduce the useful it in their life.
Along with
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this
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,
authority
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authorities

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should
takes
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take

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strict action against those
people
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who
takes
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take

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drugs
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in
the
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public
place
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places

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, so that they have fear in their
mind
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minds

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.
Thus
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, automatically, declares the
used
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of it .
Secondly
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,
instead
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of
ban
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banning

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these things,
government
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the government

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should increase the price of cigarettes,
therefore
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poor and
middle class
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middle-class

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people
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unable
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to afford that product, by
this
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sale and use of cigarettes and
tobacco
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can
be handle
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be handled

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effectively. On the other side
throws
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apply

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the price of fresh vegetables and fruit
to encourage
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encourages

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them to eat healthy food rather than unhealthy food. By
this
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, the interest of
public
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the public

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in cigarette and
tobacco
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tackle . In conclusion,
although
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ban
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banning

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cigarette
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cigarettes

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and other
tobacco
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product
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products

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is not a bad idea,
nonetheless
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it is not
only
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the only

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solve
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solution

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as
government
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the government

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can organize the health care campaign ,
increasing
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increase

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the tax
on
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apply

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it
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apply

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Task Achievement
It is critical to have a clear introduction that outlines your argument. Your introduction should explicitly state your position regarding whether you agree or disagree with the proposed ban.
Task Achievement
Make sure that each paragraph contains one clear main idea that supports your argument, and provide relevant examples to illustrate your points.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on structuring your essay with a clear progression of ideas. Use a variety of linking words to connect sentences and paragraphs while ensuring that the progression of arguments is logical and easy to follow.
Language/Complexity
Avoid grammatical errors and use a range of complex sentence structures to express ideas more precisely. Also, ensure proper spelling and punctuation to enhance the clarity of your essay.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public health
  • Tobacco products
  • Ban (noun and verb)
  • Regulation
  • Legislation
  • Consequences
  • Addiction
  • Preventative measures
  • Healthcare costs
  • Economic impact
  • Awareness campaigns
  • Tobacco industry
  • Nicotine dependency
  • Second-hand smoke
  • Detrimental effects
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