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the graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Swedan, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

the graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Swedan, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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 carbon dioxide pollution
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caused
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 by an average individual in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and
Partugal
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Portugal
 for
fourty
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forty
 years.
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, in comparison of
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starting and
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ending points the UK and Sweden, can
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 a decline in emissions per person. On
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 hand,
Italy
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 and
Portugal
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polution
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pollution
 had increased by 2007. It is evident from the data that, the United Kingdom citizens started to consume less
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a dioxide carbon
throught
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through
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 a given period. From 1967 till 2007 in
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the UK
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 was a steady
deacrese
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decrease
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 emissions for approximately five metric tones.
Also
, it is interesting to note that, Sweden had a rapid
increse
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increase
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 first ten years, it was reaching a peak in 1977, followed by a dramatic fall. It is noticeable that
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 Italy and Portugal had almost a similar dynamic in a number of polution. Both of those countries had only positive changes in
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carbon dioxide emissions. The only difference is that
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 Italy had more rapid
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 in
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 period from 1967-1977.
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