The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of people in one Asian country
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who
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passing
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passed
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the test drive between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
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, the trend showed that the percentage of
women
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and men who passed
from
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the driving tests
were
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consistently
increase
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increased
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until 2000, before it dropped in 2010 for
women
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and was stagnant for men. It can be seen that from the graph, stood at almost 50% in 1980,
women
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passed the driving exams and after two decades, it reached
to
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around 70% in 2000. Unfortunately,
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the data has shown that the percentage declined by around 5% to 65% in 2010.
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, the quality of driving of men
were
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below
the
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that
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women
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of women
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since the beginning of the period it only experienced approximately above 20%. After that, they managed to be able to finish the driving test with
a
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significant progress
for
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almost
doubled
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doubling
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at around 50% in 2000 and 2010.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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