Some people say that computer games are bad for children by all means; others believe that these games are contributing to children’s development. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Due to
the advancement of technology games
are available everywhere and children
loves
to play as computer Change the verb form
love
games
gives
pleasure to the Correct subject-verb agreement
give
children
and contributes
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contribute
in
their Change preposition
to
overall
personality. Some people argure
that it is beneficial for the younger ones because Correct your spelling
argue
advance
Replace the word
advanced
games
helps
them in enormous ways Change the verb form
help
while
other
argue that it has adverse effects on their physical and mental Fix the agreement mistake
others
health
. I am agree
with the notion that it is Change the verb form
agree
Add an article
the worse
a worse
worse
thing to play Correct word choice
worst
while
sitting at
the same place for Change preposition
in
long
time .
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a long
To begin
with, new video games
has
been introduced in Correct subject-verb agreement
have
the
society because it is a source of entertainment and knowledge. With these Correct article usage
apply
advance
Replace the word
advanced
games
Add a comma
games,
children
learn different techniques which emphasize in
their information and skills . Change preposition
apply
Moreover
, operating computer
become Fix the agreement mistake
computers
convenient
and easy method Correct article usage
a convenient
thus
, they have access to new environment
. Fix the agreement mistake
environments
Futuremore
, in Correct your spelling
Furthermore
this
modern era, playing online games
become a source of earning and juvenile
have Fix the agreement mistake
juveniles
opportunity
to make friends on social platforms. Correct article usage
the opportunity
For instance
, as per New
York survey Correct article usage
a New
millons
of young ones play Correct your spelling
millions
games
and support themselves financially and become independent.
On the other hand
, i
firmly believe that it has Change the capitalization
I
bad
impact on Add an article
a bad
the
Correct article usage
apply
health
because children
choose playing
online over physical exercises . In Change the verb form
to play
long
term , Correct article usage
the long
due to
lack Change preposition
of exercise
exercise
the problem of obesity has increased in youngsters which will Add a comma
exercise,
be invited
other Wrong verb form
cause
health
complications like poor heart health
and cholesterol. By using high internet , computers and laptops emits
harmful Change the verb form
emit
radiations
which causes infertility , Fix the agreement mistake
radiation
drain
Correct subject-verb agreement
drains
brains
and has negative effects on Correct article usage
the brains
thr
eyes . Correct your spelling
the
For instance
, according to
the
doctors majority of the Correct article usage
apply
children
are
fighting Wrong verb form
have been
with
harmful diseases over Change preposition
apply
last
decade.
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the last
To conclude
, side
effects of using Correct article usage
the side
computers
Change the noun form
computer
games
are more as
compared to their benefits because if physical and intellectual memory become weak Change preposition
apply
then
there is no advantage of
having Change preposition
to
advance
knowledge. Replace the word
advanced
Health
should be top
Correct article usage
the top
most
priority for everyone and Correct quantifier usage
apply
children
should use their time wisely and do exercises daily.Submitted by Kaurharvinder2984 on
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