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Some people think that it should be compulsory for people to retake their driving test every 5 what are the advantages and disadvantages of doing this?

#people #test
A few citizens are
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 the view that
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their
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 should be an enforcement for
people
 to repeat their driving exam after every five years. There are pros and cons of the statement and in
this
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side
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 is that
people
 can miss
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 chances that they could have acquired had they not moved away from their usual place of work.
However
, at the same
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these obligation
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 can reduce accidents that occur on the roads by a huge percentage. To commence with, in
the
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recent days the economy has really become wanting and
therefore
people
 may be unable to
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inorder
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 to get
money
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 needed for retaking
driving
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 test.
For instance
, there are very many residents in the
worldwide
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 who depend on the cash that they get from daily public transportation for a living.
Therefore
, missing an opportunity to work and make money just because of a requirement of doing an exam can in turn affect their budget or rather lead to suffering of hunger.
Conversely
, if the examination
repeatation
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repetition
 becomes a
mondatory
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mandatory
then
 more motor vehicle accidents that we here on the news will reduce since the exam will always renew the driver's knowledge.
For example
, if someone takes a
while
 before
practicing
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 what he had learnt a few years ago
then
definately
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definitely
 he may make a mistake and if the mind is not renewed and the correction
be
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 done the error can be repeated more often resulting
to
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 loss of life of
passagers
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passengers
 and even the driver himself. To sum it all up, there are both merits and demerits regarding the given statement as it can lead to careful driving on the road
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less
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 accidents but
on the other
hand
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 affect
people
's budgeting. With regard
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this
, we should be prepared
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 any advantage or disadvantage that the enforcement can come with.
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