The maps show about the transformation of Felixstone city fro 1967 to 2001.

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Feliztone city between 1967 and 2001.

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significant modifications had been

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occurred

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period,

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including

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farmland and

fishmarket

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, many places

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appeared,

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as private and public beaches, a car park, and wind turbines.

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, the shops and a high street were surrounded by a gold course and

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farmland on top of the map in 1967.

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, at the bottom, vegetation and dunes were placed next to a hotel and a cafe just next to the marina with a pier located from the left side of the fish market.

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, looking at the modern map, a golf course and shops from the right side of the street remained unchanged,

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apartments

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replaced

the whole line of shops from the right side in 2001.

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, a swimming pool, hotel and tennis courts were established

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of a farmland which was erased from the map.

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market and a pier were

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sucessfully replced

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successfully replaced

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beaches for

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public and private use.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

176 words

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