Films and games can be accessed at any time from mobile devices like smart phones, tablets and laptop computer. Do the advantages of such development outweigh the disadvantage? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Two decades ago, If we
want
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wanted
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to watch
movie
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a movie
the movie
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,
Cinema
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a Cinema
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theatre was the only available option and it
depeds
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depended
on the place where we
live
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lived
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. It was accessible for the City population but it was
occationally posible
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occasionally possible
for
urban
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the urban
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and
rual
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rural
population
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populations
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. A decade ago,
Televison
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television
got popular where
lot
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a lot
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of channels started playing moving and Video
games
become
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became
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popular. It was
very
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a very
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fancy electronic gadget
then
to have video
game
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games
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at home. If we
fastfarward
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forward
10 years, the evaluation
on
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of
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mobile devices with good connectivity
of
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to
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internet
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the internet
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is
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has
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changed the whole story.
Now a days
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Nowadays
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, it is easy to access movies and
games
online and a Smartphone / Tablet / Computer can able to support both. It saves
lot
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a lot
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of
time
, we do not want to wait
untill
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until
some media operator
to play
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plays
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the movie on the channels, we can watch it
any
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anytime
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time
. some
time
back children used to visit
neighbours
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neighbours'
neighbour's
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house
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houses
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to play video
games
it was not easy to afford
by
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apply
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all
.
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of.
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Now,
A
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apply
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mobile devices
provides
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provide
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vast
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a vast
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range of
games
to play. In the current
scinario
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scenario
, these
technology
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technological
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advancements help us to reduce the use of plastic and
semi conductors
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semiconductors
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.
However
, These mobile device takes
lot
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a lot
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of
time
of
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for
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the users. The excessive
amout
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amount
of
contant
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content
is being produced and it is made available for easy access in the form of movies / series /
Games
. we start to browse about something but after
sometime
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some time
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we end up on
someting
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something
else. These content creators use
the
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apply
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AI algorithms to study our
browase
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browse
browser
pattern / choice of
games
. based on
which
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this
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we get
lot
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a lot
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of
suggesstion
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suggestion
suggestions
and it
enduce
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induce
us to scroll on and on or to choose different
games
. Too much
of
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apply
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information in a short
time
will confuse
human
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the human
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brain and it will
invite
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cause
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mental disorders.
The
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recent survey
was
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apply
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published by Sun
publications
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Publications
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on the topic of "Mobile Usage side-effects",
age
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the age
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group of 6 years to 14 years, who
uses
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use
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the Smart
phone
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phones
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/
Tablet
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Tablets
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more than 6 hrs a day,
they
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apply
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started getting eye vision issues and
problem
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problems
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in interacting with people. In my
openion
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opinion
, Mobile devices
opens
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open
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the door
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door
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doors
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for many things if we
understrand
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understand
it
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them
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better and start using
it
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them
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for positive things. earlier day, if we want to refer we need to go to
libreary
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library
and it consumes
time
and
lot
process to be followed. Now, google can help us
on
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with
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lot
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a lot
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of things. The technology provides advantages like quick access, more content for
referance
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reference
,
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and help
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help
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helps
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to pass the
time
with friends and family.
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