*Some people say that the government should spend money on measures to save languages that are used by few speakers, while others believe that it is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion*

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Government
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policy
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on spending
money
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for preserving
language
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is still debatable. There are
number
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a number
the number

It appears that the phrase number does not contain the correct article usage. Consider making a change.

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of
people
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believe
Correct pronoun usage
who believe

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that
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government
Correct article usage
the government

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should allocate the
budget
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for
language
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which is used by
few
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a few

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users in order to save the
language
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,
while
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others argue that the
policy
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tend
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tends

The plural verb tend does not appear to agree with the singular subject the policy. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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to waste the national
budget
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.
This
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essay will discuss
about
Remove the preposition
apply

The preposition about seems unecessary after the verb discuss. Consider removing the preposition.

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the
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apply

It is unlikely that your sentence needs the article the before both. Consider deleting the article.

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both points of view and give evidence as to why spending
money
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for
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on

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saving
language
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is superior. Governments always make financial
planing
Correct your spelling
planning

The word planing doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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each
years
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year

The singular quantifier each is followed by the plural noun years. Consider changing the noun to the singular or using a different quantifier.

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, especially for
culture
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and
language
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. They should make a
policy
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which can lead to spending much
money
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for
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on

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opertional
Correct your spelling
operations

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such
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us
Correct your spelling
as

The word us doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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giving
course
Fix the agreement mistake
courses

It seems that course may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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or
workshop
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workshops

It seems that workshop may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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for those who
wants
Correct subject-verb agreement
want

It seems that the verb wants does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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to learn about the
language
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. Yet, only
limited
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a limited

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person who wants to learn because the
languange
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language

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is not popular.
As a result
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, it makes the
policy
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become ineffective and tends to waste the
budget
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.
However
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, preserving the
language
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is not about many or few
speaker
Change to a plural noun
speakers

The singular countable noun speaker follows the quantifier many, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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, but it is about the
preseve
Correct your spelling
preserve

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the legacy and identity of the nation. Some countries have an
indentity
Correct your spelling
identity

If you don’t want indentity to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

where
languange
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language

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as
Correct your spelling
is

The word as doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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a
culture
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, even that can be called
as
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a

The word as doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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heritage.
This
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matter can not be valued with
money
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, because the
language
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is unique and it is part of
culture
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.
For example
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, Indonesia has more than two hundred languages which
spreads
Change the verb form
spread

The singular verb spreads does not appear to agree with the plural subject more than two hundred languages. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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out to
thirty one
Add a hyphen
thirty-one

It appears that you are missing a hyphen with the compound number thirty one. Consider adding a hyphen.

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provinces. Only
certain
Correct article usage
a certain

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number of
people
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who
Correct pronoun usage
apply

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speak the
language
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but the
government
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still have been spending
budget
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to preserve the
language
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as respect and
responsibilty
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responsibility

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to the
culture
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. In conclusion, despite there are number of certain
people
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contradict
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who contradict

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about
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apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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the allocation of
national
Add an article
the national

The noun phrase national budget seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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budget
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as
effort
Add an article
an effort

The noun phrase effort seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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to save the
languange
Correct your spelling
language

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, in my point of view, it does not really matter
to
Change preposition
whether

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government
Correct article usage
the government

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spending
budget
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for saving the
language
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although
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only
few
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a few

It appears that the phrase only does not contain the correct article usage. Consider making a change.

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people
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speak about that.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and the following sentences support that topic. Review the organization of ideas to enhance the logical flow.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices to link ideas across sentences and paragraphs more effectively.
task achievement
Develop your arguments further with relevant, specific examples to strengthen your discussion.
task achievement
Clarify and expand on your perspective in the conclusion, ensuring it is a summary of the points discussed and it includes a clear opinion.
general advice
Address grammatical errors and improve sentence structure for increased clarity and to reduce ambiguity.
general advice
Work on expanding vocabulary range to better express nuances, particularly when discussing complex issues.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revitalization
  • linguistic diversity
  • cultural heritage
  • homogenization
  • cost-effective
  • preservation
  • digital archiving
  • allocations
  • minority communities
  • pragmatic approach
  • financial resources
  • bilingual education
  • endangered languages
  • cultural identity
  • ethnolinguistics
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