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*Some people say that the government should spend money on measures to save languages that are used by few speakers, while others believe that it is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion*

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Government
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policy
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 on spending
money
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 for preserving
language
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 is still debatable. There are
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 of
people
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believe
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who believe
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 that
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government
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the government
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 should allocate the
budget
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 for
language
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 which is used by
few
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a few
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 users in order to save the
language
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,
while
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 others argue that the
policy
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tend
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tends
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 to waste the national
budget
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.
This
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 essay will discuss
about
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apply
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the
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apply
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both points of view and give evidence as to why spending
money
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for
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on
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 saving
language
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 is superior. Governments always make financial
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planning
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 each
years
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year
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, especially for
culture
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 and
language
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. They should make a
policy
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 which can lead to spending much
money
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for
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on
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opertional
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operations
such
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us
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as
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 giving
course
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courses
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 or
workshop
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workshops
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 for those who
wants
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want
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 to learn about the
language
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. Yet, only
limited
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a limited
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 person who wants to learn because the
languange
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language
 is not popular.
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, it makes the
policy
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 become ineffective and tends to waste the
budget
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.
However
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, preserving the
language
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 is not about many or few
speaker
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speakers
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, but it is about the
preseve
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preserve
 the legacy and identity of the nation. Some countries have an
indentity
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identity
 where
languange
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language
as
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is
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 a
culture
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, even that can be called
as
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a
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 heritage.
This
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 matter can not be valued with
money
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, because the
language
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 is unique and it is part of
culture
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.
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, Indonesia has more than two hundred languages which
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 out to
thirty one
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 provinces. Only
certain
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a certain
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 number of
people
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who
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apply
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speak the
language
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 but the
government
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 still have been spending
budget
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 to preserve the
language
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 as respect and
responsibilty
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responsibility
 to the
culture
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. In conclusion, despite there are number of certain
people
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contradict
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who contradict
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about
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the allocation of
national
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the national
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budget
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 as
effort
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an effort
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 to save the
languange
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language
, in my point of view, it does not really matter
to
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whether
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government
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the government
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 spending
budget
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 for saving the
language
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although
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 only
few
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a few
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people
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 speak about that.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and the following sentences support that topic. Review the organization of ideas to enhance the logical flow.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices to link ideas across sentences and paragraphs more effectively.
task achievement
Develop your arguments further with relevant, specific examples to strengthen your discussion.
task achievement
Clarify and expand on your perspective in the conclusion, ensuring it is a summary of the points discussed and it includes a clear opinion.
general advice
Address grammatical errors and improve sentence structure for increased clarity and to reduce ambiguity.
general advice
Work on expanding vocabulary range to better express nuances, particularly when discussing complex issues.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revitalization
  • linguistic diversity
  • cultural heritage
  • homogenization
  • cost-effective
  • preservation
  • digital archiving
  • allocations
  • minority communities
  • pragmatic approach
  • financial resources
  • bilingual education
  • endangered languages
  • cultural identity
  • ethnolinguistics
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