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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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These maps illustrate the transformation of Ryemouth village from 1995 to the present day.
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, the village witnessed minor changes with the most noticeable being the disappearance of
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farmland, a forest
park
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, and a fishing port. In 1995, there was a T-shaped
road
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 in the middle of the village that ran toward the sea. On the northwest, there were
houses
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 next to the
road
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,
whereas
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 on the northeast, there was
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farmland right beside the forest
park
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. On the
left hand
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side
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, In the
center
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 of the
road
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, there was a small rectangular residential.
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 of the
road
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,
while
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 on the east
side
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, there was a hotel opposite the cafe, on the opposite
side
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 was an array of shops opposite the fish market. In the south, there was a fishing port on the sea. Currently, the northwest
houses
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 were added more
houses
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. Farmland and forest
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park
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 were replaced by
a
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golf and
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tennis courts respectively. A new
road
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 connecting the west and the main
road
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 was built next to the rectangular residential. There were some
houses
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 added on the left-hand
side
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 of the rectangular residential area
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 it remains intact. The new car
park
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 was constructed next to the hotel. Strikingly, shops were replaced by some new restaurants.
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, a new apartment was erected opposite the old shops. Noticeably, the fishing port was removed.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, road, houses, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • village
  • Ryemouth
  • 1995
  • present
  • houses
  • small school
  • residential areas
  • amenities
  • population
  • increased
  • growth
  • expansion
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