The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000
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The given illustration depicts information on the consumption of unhealthy types of food among teenagers who live in Australia over a 25-year period. A glance at the graph makes it clear that
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there was a dramatic growth in hamburgers and pizza
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fish and chips experienced a fluctuation process which is followed by
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fall. Turning to the details, it is clearly seen that fish and chips were the highest employed type of food from 1975 to 1985,in
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of time
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fluctuated
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, which shows 100
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decreased
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almost 80
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went down gradually. By 2000 year they made up 40 times eaten per year. Regarding pizza and hamburgers , they saw a sharp increase from 10 times eaten per year, both reached 80 and 100 respectively. It is interesting to note that, from 1995 both of them (Pizza and hamburgers) leveled off.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Spike
  • Dip
  • Steady growth
  • Decline
  • Plateau
  • Consumption patterns
  • Fast food
  • Processed snacks
  • Health consciousness
  • Marketing influence
  • Demographic factors
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Nutritional education
  • Epidemiological impact
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