The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000
The provided graph demonstrates the quantity and sort of utilization of fast food among the age below eighteen from the years 1975 to 2000 Looking at the general, one variety of take away food
Hamburger
was on peak in 2000. Meanwhile, Pizza was quite famous in 1995.
In contrast
,
Fish
and
Chips
were
most
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the most
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trendy since 1985. A good starting point would be, the using up of pizza from 1975 to 1985. The number of eaten was 5 in 1975 but
started
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started to
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jump up and drop to 20
dusring
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during
1980
still
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and still
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manage
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managed
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to rise up in 1985 by 30 tasted.
Whereas
, pizza began to nearly
favourite
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the favourite
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item consumed by Australian people from 1990 to 2000 and
end
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ended
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up by 83. Another noticeable thing was comparisons of
fish
and
chips
as well as
hamburger
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hamburgers
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betwixt
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between
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1975 to 2000.
Hamburger
was not much
adore
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adored
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and only 20
time
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times
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eat
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eaten
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up by
youngusters
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youngsters
.
Beside
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Besides
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fish
abd
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and
chips
was
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were
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best-loved
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a best-loved
the best-loved
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item in 1975 in the company of youth which
100
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was 100
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times used up.
However
,
striked
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struck
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out by
minusing
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misusing
min using
20 times in 1980 but
lead
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led
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to
high
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a high
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up in 1985 that was 95 utilized . Simultaneously,
hamburger
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hamburgers
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establish
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established
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the
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an
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increment
of
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in
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eating
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the eating
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rate to 60 in 1980. Afterwards, the
vouge
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vogue
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of
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for
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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began to
expanding
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expand
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every year reportedly 100 times
devoun
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devour
devon
by youngsters in 2000.
Whereas
,
fish
abd
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and
chips
thing
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things
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get going downwards annually. In 2000 only 39
time
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times
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it is obosess by Australian minors.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hamburger, fish, chips with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Spike
  • Dip
  • Steady growth
  • Decline
  • Plateau
  • Consumption patterns
  • Fast food
  • Processed snacks
  • Health consciousness
  • Marketing influence
  • Demographic factors
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Nutritional education
  • Epidemiological impact
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