The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000
The provided graph demonstrates the quantity and sort of utilization of fast food among the age below eighteen from the years 1975 to 2000
Looking at the general, one variety of take away food
Hamburger
was on peak in 2000. Meanwhile, Pizza was quite famous in 1995. In contrast
, Fish
and Chips
were most
trendy since 1985.
A good starting point would be, the using up of pizza from 1975 to 1985. The number of eaten was 5 in 1975 but Correct article usage
the most
started
jump up and drop to 20 Add the particle
started to
dusring
1980 Correct your spelling
during
still
Correct word choice
and still
manage
to rise up in 1985 by 30 tasted. Wrong verb form
managed
Whereas
, pizza began to nearly favourite
item consumed by Australian people from 1990 to 2000 and Correct article usage
the favourite
end
up by 83.
Another noticeable thing was comparisons of Wrong verb form
ended
fish
and chips
as well as
hamburger
Fix the agreement mistake
hamburgers
betwixt
1975 to 2000. Change preposition
between
Hamburger
was not much adore
and only 20 Wrong verb form
adored
time
Change to a plural noun
times
eat
up by Wrong verb form
eaten
youngusters
. Correct your spelling
youngsters
Beside
Correct your spelling
Besides
fish
abd
Correct your spelling
and
chips
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
best-loved
item in 1975 in the company of youth which Add an article
a best-loved
the best-loved
100
times used up. Add a missing verb
was 100
However
, striked
out by Correct your spelling
struck
minusing
20 times in 1980 but Correct your spelling
misusing
min using
lead
to Wrong verb form
led
high
up in 1985 that was 95 utilized . Simultaneously, Correct article usage
a high
hamburger
Fix the agreement mistake
hamburgers
establish
Wrong verb form
established
the
increment Correct article usage
an
of
Change preposition
in
eating
rate to 60 in 1980. Afterwards, the Correct article usage
the eating
vouge
Correct your spelling
vogue
of
Change preposition
for
hamburger
began to Fix the agreement mistake
hamburgers
expanding
every year reportedly 100 times Wrong verb form
expand
devoun
by youngsters in 2000. Correct your spelling
devour
devon
Whereas
, fish
abd
Correct your spelling
and
chips
thing
get going downwards annually. In 2000 only 39 Fix the agreement mistake
things
time
it is obosess by Australian minors.Change to a plural noun
times
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hamburger, fish, chips with synonyms.
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