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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant
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These bar graphs illustrate the extra
work
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 that UK
students
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 were doing rather than permanent professions
while
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 studying for a degree and after completing it in 2008.
Overall
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, the majority of both graduates and postgraduates tend to go for
further
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studies
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instead
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 of doing a job, and the least
amount
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 of them were engaged in voluntary
work
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.
However
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, a vast
amount
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 of graduates seem to be in part-time
work
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, voluntary
work
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, or
further
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studies
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, and others are unemployed compared to postgraduate
students
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.
Firstly
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, a large number of graduate
students
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 were doing
further
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studies
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 and the
amount
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 was 29665, and the second largest
amount
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 was 17735 who
were
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was
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 doing part-time
work
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.
Next,
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16235
students
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 were unemployed, and the lowest
amount
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 was 3500
students
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 doing voluntary
work
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.
Secondly
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, postgraduates who were doing
further
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studies
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 seem the highest and it was 2725 and,
then
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, part-time
work
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, unemployment, and voluntary
work
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 had second highest to lowest
amount
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 and the statistics were 2535, 1625, and 345 respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, students, studies, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • full-time work
  • graduate
  • postgraduate
  • trends
  • part-time work
  • further study
  • gap year
  • traveling
  • unemployment
  • percentages
  • proportion
  • significant differences
  • subsequent activities
  • career progression
  • academic advancement
  • job market
  • vocational training
  • data interpretation
  • employment sector
  • career-oriented steps
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