The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000
The line graph depicts the average
of
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fast food consumption by Australian adolescents from 1975 to 2000, divided into three types of ready-made
meal
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which are
Pizza
,
Fish
and
Chips
, and
Hamburgers
.
Overall
, from an overview perspective, it can be seen that,
while
pizza
and
hamburgers
followed similar trajectories and dramatically rose,
fish
and
chips
intake among
the
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adolescents fell over the
period
. In 1975, the number of people
ate
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fish
and
chips
stood at 100
times
per year, higher than
pizza
and
hamburgers
where both
only
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below 20
times
eaten per year. After experiencing a decline in 1980 to around 80
times
eaten per year, the amount of
fish
and
chips
intake rose and reached a notable high of 97
times
eaten in 1985. Despite a fluctuation, the consumption rate of
fish
and
chips
steadily dropped and a data point at around 39% to the end of the
period
surveyed.
However
,
pizza
and
hamburgers
showed different
phenomenon
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compared to
fish
and
chips
.
In addition
, the pattern of
pizza
and
hamburgers
ingestion
were
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similar but the consumption rate of
hamburgers
was higher for the majority of the
period
. At the initial point in 1975, adolescents ate
pizza
and
hamburgers
around 8 and 10
times
, respectively. Over the next
period
, there
were
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significant
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a significant
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increase
of
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pizza
ingestion to a high of 80
times
eaten in 1995, tenfolding the amount in 1975, and remained stable afterwards.
Similarly
, after reaching
a
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highest number at around 100
times
eaten,
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the intake
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rate of
hamburger
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hamburgers
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stayed constant until 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pizza, fish, chips, hamburgers, period, times with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Spike
  • Dip
  • Steady growth
  • Decline
  • Plateau
  • Consumption patterns
  • Fast food
  • Processed snacks
  • Health consciousness
  • Marketing influence
  • Demographic factors
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Nutritional education
  • Epidemiological impact
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