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In the last century the first man to walk on the moon said it was a great step for mankind. But in fact space travel has made little difference to most people lives today. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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 century,
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 of developing technologies, some can
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 for discovery tendency. Based on what
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the first man
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 stepped on the moon's surface said,
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 is merit for mankind.
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,
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 the fact that can be seen
space
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travel
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 has changed most individual's
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. I partially agree with
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 statement. Based on alterations in the
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-related industry in
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recent centuries, mankind achieved
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 opportunity to step on the moon's surface. It claimed that these achievements
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 beneficial, but changed people's
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. There are some agreements , which
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,
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this
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, governments are forced to dedicate a significant budget to
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travel
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. these sources are gained
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 from the money that people pay.
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, these can lead to some issues. Patently it is obvious that
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 impose regulations to devote immense amounts of money to the
space
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 industry, progressively, it is likely that other aspects of society like healthcare would have less attention. It is not undeniable that
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travel
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 has a huge impact on human
life
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 and can be considered a factor in human
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 changes. Because it can not observe modifications in our lifestyle based on
this
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.
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, the way that we have lived has not changed. The companies and government are responsible for
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travel
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 processes and have not disturbed our
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life
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. In order to come to a conclusion regarding what has been discussed, in my opinion,
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travel
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are
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 caused some alteration in our
life
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, which includes the dedication of more money and attention to it and as I mentioned earlier I partially agree with the statement.

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Task Achievement
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