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Human activity has had a negative effect on ecosystems, animals and plants across the world. Some people believe this cannot be changes while others feel that we can still take action protect living things and the environment. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, significant challenges are associated with the global environment, animal species, and vegetation. It is debated whether the general public or the government should address these issues.
This
 essay will discuss both viewpoints and conclude with my opinion. First and foremost, individuals can contribute to preserving nature by engaging in
simply
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 daily activities.
Resycling
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Recycling
 waste and reusing materials help keep the planet keep and safe.
For instance
, using reusable bottles
instead
 of plastic ones promotes fresh air and less contaminated marine life. Simple actions, like using electricity when it is needed, planting trees, and caring for animals'
habitat
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 improve the Earth's ecosystem.
Consequently
,
this
 indicates that every individual can play a role in preserving nature from contamination.
On the other hand
, government should implement environmentally friendly policies. These policies can be promoted through popular online social media services.
For example
, recent TV announcements in Australia stated that individuals who recycle glass drink bottles will receive a ten-cent refund for each item.
As a result
, people are encouraged to dispose of their rubbish in an eco-friendly way, minimising negative environmental impact.
Additionally
, investing in the production of hybrid cars
instead
 of gasoline ones helps deal with air pollution caused by fossil fuel emissions. In conclusion, both the government and individuals should
activly
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actively
 engage in eco-friendly practices to preserve our planet. I firmly believe that providing education about the importance of sustainability will empower people to adopt environmentally friendly actions.
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coherence cohesion
While your essay presents a basic structure, the introduction and conclusion can be enhanced to more effectively signal the topic and summarize your argument. Make sure the introduction outlines the key points you will discuss, and ensure the conclusion clearly restates your opinion and the reasons behind it.
coherence cohesion
Try to provide clear topic sentences for each paragraph to guide the reader on what the paragraph will be about. Ensure that the ideas flow logically from one to another, and use a wider range of cohesive devices such as linking words and phrases to enhance coherence.
task achievement
Make sure to fully address the task by discussing both sides of the argument equally and presenting a clear opinion. Expand your main points with more detailed explanations and more specific examples to strengthen your argument.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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