The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart
illustrate
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the rate of families owned and rented accommodation in U.K and Wales from 1918 and 2011,
period
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a period
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of nearly 100 years.
Overall
, the highest rate in 1918 was renting homes,
whereas
the lowest rate was owning
houses
. On
other
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the other
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hand, owned
houses
increased sharply in 1939,
while
renting dropped slightly in the same year. Looking at the details, rented accommodation was the highest owning one in1918, at about 78%
whereas
owned was the lowest
on
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1918, at nearly 33%. The families owning
houses
increased gradually from about 22 to around 33 percent nearly
by
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11 proportion a period
nearly
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of nearly
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25
year
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years
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. After a sharp climb in the ratio of owning, the renting proportion decreased gradually
while
the owning jumped
significant
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from nearly 23% to about 70% in 2001 Looking at more details can see that the percentage of owning was approximately 70 per cent. On
other
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contrary, the percentage of renting was almost 32%.
In addition
to that, the ratio of owning
houses
was exactly 50 per cent in 1971.
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