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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart illustrates the information about how the households spent their weekly salary in 1968 and
in
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2018 respectively.
Overall
, in 1968,
Food
 was an important
prioritiy
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priority
 for most families, housing, clothing and
footware
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footwear
 were the second choices for formal
people
.
However
, leisure
were
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 become the most essential
activities
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 for the communities in 2018,
food
 got a
sginificant
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significant
 decline after 50 years. Look at the black bar, the family
lived
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who lived
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 in 2018 contributed 35% of their income on
food
,
15
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and 15
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%
were
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 comprised
by
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of
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 housing rent and
cllthing
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clothing
 respectively. Eventually,
people
 were unwilling to pay their money on fuel and power which was slightly over 5%. In 2018, these
people
 started changing their spending habits from
food
 to leisure which is around 22%,
food
were
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 not
very
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 important as
people
though
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thought
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 which is
approximatly
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approximately
 18%, in that generation, housing
obtain
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a huge improvement and even
over
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the expenses of
food
,
which
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located at around 28%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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