The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000
The graph provided
the
information Correct article usage
apply
of
the amount of Change preposition
on
pizza
, fish
and chips
, and hamburgers
that the Australian teenagers eaten
in 5 years, from 1975 to 2000. We can see clearly that Add the auxiliary verb
ate
pizza
and hamburgers
eaten are having a steep increase while
fish
and chips
are
fluctuated and eventually decreased from the given period.
Unnecessary verb
apply
Initially
in 1975, fish
and chips
are
the most consumed junk food Wrong verb form
were
between
Change preposition
among
the
others with over 100 consumption per Correct article usage
apply
year
. It has been fluctuating untill
1985, before the huge drop and Correct your spelling
until
continously
decrease. Ended up being the least consumed junk food of all in 2000 with below 40 Correct your spelling
continuous
fish
and chips
consumed per year
.
Pizza
and hamburgers
started in a
Correct article usage
apply
similiar
positions with only below 10 consumed per Correct your spelling
similar
year
in 1975. The number of hamburgers
eaten had drastically increased untill
1985. From Correct your spelling
until
then
to 2000, hamburgers
had only appoximately
20 added number. Correct your spelling
approximately
However
, hamburgers
is
the most consumed junk food by Australian teenagers in 2000. Following in Wrong verb form
were
the
second place, Correct article usage
apply
pizza
start
to Wrong verb form
started
increased
Wrong verb form
increase
untill
1995 and reached its peak Correct your spelling
until
for
about 85 Change preposition
of
pizza
eaten per Fix the agreement mistake
pizzas
year
. 5 years after
, the number of Rephrase
later
pizza
getting eaten is going flat with no significant differences.Fix the agreement mistake
pizzas
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pizza, fish, chips, hamburgers, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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