Nowadays celebrities earn more money than politicians. What are the reasons for this?. Do you agree or disagree
Presently artists earn more
money
than politicians. Perhaps, many people think that they frequently purchase an expensive goods
, Correct the article-noun agreement
expensive goods
an expensive good
however
I totally disagree with Add a comma
however,
this
opinion because celebrities
are not a fixed job
and actually celebrities
troublesome obtain a
work. Correct article usage
apply
This
essay will elaborate in detail on the reasons for my stance as well as
examples in the subsequent paragraph.
To begin
with, the primary reason is that politics
is a
Change the article
an
inveriable
work than Correct your spelling
invariable
artist
is not a steady Add an article
the artist
an artist
job
. Work in politics
does not depend on having a job
or no
because politicians Correct your spelling
not
has
already Change the verb form
have
acquire
responsibility in government throughout Change the verb form
acquired
in
the several time. Change preposition
apply
In contrast
, as
a celebrity only Change preposition
apply
possesses
Correct subject-verb agreement
possess
money
if they procure calling
Verb problem
apply
an
employment, and if they do not get a Remove the article
apply
job
, they do not have money
. For instance
, in ministry, even though their works only meet with others, they still gain a similar salary.
Secondly
, another reason is that job
as Correct article usage
the job
a
Change the article
an
artist
is arduous gotten
. Currently, many artists move to Verb problem
apply
politics
because they have been difficult to procure a job
in their environment. For example
, one of Indonesian
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the Indonesian
celebrities
is called Venna Melinda. She has been around 10 years in the world of politics
because she feel
that the world of Change the verb form
feels
politics
is more promising than as an artist
, and she has not been
acquired some jobs in Unnecessary verb
apply
Correct article usage
the celebrities
celebrities
world.
Change the noun form
celebrity
To sum up
, working as an artist
is not also
getting earn a lot of money
because that job
is not a fixed job
and working as a celebrity is not easy to be obtained
. Thereby, nowadays a majority of Wrong verb form
obtain
celebrities
moves
as Correct subject-verb agreement
move
a politicians
.Correct the article-noun agreement
a politician
politicians
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