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Queen Mary Hospital The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

Queen Mary Hospital The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The picture denotes the changes that have taken location at Queen Mary Hospital
its
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in its
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 construction in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
According to
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 the data, there were
deletion
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deletions
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 and
addition
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additions
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several
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in several
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 places in every period.
Additionally
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, there was movement of several
buildings
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 in 1980 and 2000. In 1960, there were Shopping Centre and Farmland, but in 1980 and 200, the Shopping Centre and Farmland are deleted.
Whereas
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, there were
addition
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some
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apply
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buildings
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 in 1980 and 2000 that were Pharmacy and Nursing School where those
buildings
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 did not exist in 1960. There were several movements
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buildings
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 in 1980 and 2000. A Cancer Centre in 1980 only had a small place, but in 2000,
this
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 building was more enormous than
foregoing
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the previous
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 year.
While
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, Nursing
School
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Schools
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 and Car Park were smaller than in 1980, and Hospital and Pharmacy had a similar size in 1980 and 2000.
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, the
located
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 of the main road was fixed in the North of the
buildings
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since
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from
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 1960 until 2000.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words buildings with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • ancillary
  • expansion
  • capacity
  • medical services
  • emergency department
  • research center
  • modernization
  • aesthetics
  • functionality
  • healthcare technology
  • population growth
  • facility improvements
  • patient care
  • infrastructure
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