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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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Diagrams illustrating the current planning of a university's
sports
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 and its proposed future plans.
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sports
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 is likely to undergo some significant changes. The most striking changes are the development of the
two
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 outdoor
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 and the addition of various
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 facilities. At present,
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 has a large building in the middle and
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 outdoor
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 to the west and east. Inside the building, there is a reception facing the main entrance, a 25-metre swimming pool behind the reception, and a gym at the back. People can access the seating area by the door on the right of the reception desk,
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 the door on the left leads to the changing room.
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 the second map, the
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 will be merged with the main building. On the original site of the western outdoor
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, a large leisure pool will be constructed,
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 a big
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 hall and
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 studios for dancing will be built on the site of the other outdoor
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. There will
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 additional changing rooms, a new café and a
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 shop on either side of the main entrance. The gym is planned to double in size,
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 the remaining features will stay unchanged.
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Task Achievement
To improve in the area of task achievement, try to ensure that your summary encompasses all key features of the layouts presented. Be comprehensive in your approach, addressing each element explicitly and how it will be transformed.
Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance clarity in your descriptions by using a wider range of cohesive devices and paragraphing effectively to guide the reader through the comparison of the sports center's current state and its projected developments.

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