The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows information about the expenditure of weekly
families
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income in a country in 1968 and 2018, measuring in percentage.
Overall
, the primary
expanses
of income
was
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dedicated
for
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food, but a
half century
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later, leisure did.
Initially
, the most substantial income accounted for food at 35%, followed by clothing and
footware
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footwear
, and housing
in
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a small rate.
Thus
, the same proportion was allocated to transport, household goods, and personal goods, amounting
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9%. Notably, in 2018,
the
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food underwent significantly a
down trend
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which had almost
a
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half of expenditure compared to in the past by about 12%.
However
, housing
expanses
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surged
to
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by one a fifth;
moreover
, families used more money for leisure activities
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approximately 22%. Transport
expanses
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expenses
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climbed to around 14% in 2018, almost doubling about 7% allocation in 1968. The spending on household goods took the remaining rate, but Fuel and power
expanses
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were plugged from above 5% to around 4%, taking the least of spending.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expanses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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