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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment

#plans #show #layout #university’s #sports #centre #redevelopment
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 about the changes
of
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 the university’s
sport
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centre
 layout before and after redevelopment.
Overall
, it can be seen that the size of the
sport
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sports
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centre
 will be extended
and
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by repurposing the outdoor
courts
 beside the existing complex. The 25m pool in the
centre
 of
arena
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 will not be changed
along with
 the entrance
area
, reception, changing room, and seating
area
.
Gym
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area
 will be extended to the east. Outdoor
courts
at
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on
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 the east side of
existing
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the existing
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sport
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sports
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center
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centre
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 will be redeveloped into several new facilities.
At
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 the
far east
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, two dance
studio
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studios
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 will be built.
Next,
new
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a new
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 changing room will be constructed
along with
 the cafe in the
south east
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southeast
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area
.
Then
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a sport
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sport
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sports
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 hall will be built to replace the outdoor
courts
.
Furthermore
, outdoor
courts
at
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on
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 the west side of the current
sport
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sports
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centre
.
New
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 leisure pool will be constructed.
In addition
,
additional
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an additional
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 changing room and sports shop will be built on the
south west
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southwest
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 side of the
area
.
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coherence cohesion
The essay needs a coherent introduction and conclusion. Start by paraphrasing the task prompt and end with a summary of the main points.
coherence cohesion
Organise the essay into clear paragraphs, each containing one main idea with supporting details.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices (such as 'however,' 'furthermore,' and 'in addition') to link ideas within and across paragraphs effectively.
task achievement
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that describes what the paragraph will discuss.
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Develop the main points by providing more detailed comparisons of the before and after redevelopment instead of listing the changes.
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Use specific examples or data when explaining the changes, to provide a clearer picture of the redevelopment.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • redevelopment
  • expansion
  • modern amenities
  • recreational activities
  • cater
  • enhancement
  • aesthetics
  • accommodate
  • upgraded
  • welcoming
  • significantly expanded
  • current layout
  • future layout
  • gym enthusiasts
  • modernized
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