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Behaviour in schools is getting worse. Explain the cause of this problem and suggest some possible solutions.

#behaviour #schools
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In
this
 day and age,
students
 tend to behave badly at school. There are several causes of
this
 alarming trend, but measures could certainly be taken to tackle
this
 problem. In my opinion, two main factors are to be blamed for the way young people behave at school nowadays.
Firstly
, modern parents tend to be too lenient or permissive. Many
children
 become accustomed to getting whatever they want, and they find it difficult to accept the demands of teachers or the limits imposed on them by school rules.
Secondly
, many
schools
 lack disciplines and structures that monitor pupils'
behaviors
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.
For instance
,
students
 feel free to show disrespectful
behavior
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such
 as using phones, eating and hurling verbal abuse
with
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 their teacher which leads to lacking respect.
Students
'
behavior
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 can certainly be improved. I believe that the change must start
from
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 parents, who play an important role
to set
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in setting
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 up the development of
children
. When
children
 misbehave or break the rules, parents should take
actions
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 to deter their
children
 and take responsibility for their
children
’s
behavior
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.
In addition
,
schools
 could play an important role in training so
schools
 need clear rules and codes of conduct which can help teachers have the power to punish disruptive
students
 and give
students
 a harsh punishment if they
misbehaved
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. In a nutshell,
while
 there are evident reasons that bring about
this
 phenomenon, I believe that great efforts from
family
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families
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 and
schools
 are necessary to change the bad
behavior
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 of pupils in recent years.
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