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The maps below show an industrial area in town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make cmparisons where relevant

The maps below show an industrial area in town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make cmparisons where relevant
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The maps illustrate manufacturing
areas
 in the town of Norbiton compared with the future enhancement plan of the
city
.
Overall
, It is noticeable that the growth of the facilities of a
city
 will remove factories from these
areas
 to resident
areas
 in the future and in
thier
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their
 established the bridge for transport to farms
areas
.
Moreover
, farm
areas
 are in the north of
city
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the city
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. The predictable maps depict the crucial improvement of roads in the
city
 from the north and northwestern. Shops have been established in the southwestern of the
city
. The Southeastern established a medical center for
recover
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recovery
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 and healing people.
Moreover
, Included more residential
areas
.
While
 schools and playgrounds would
create
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be created
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 for children to play and
education
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educate
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. in eastern.
Also
, the bridge would established in the north.In the center of the future development map apparent roads roundabout for
transportations
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transportation
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 and farm
areas
 located the north of
city
Correct article usage
the city
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 same before improvement.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words areas, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "improvement" was used 2 times.
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