Share your academic and non-academic accomplishments (applicable to undergraduate and vocational students) and any relevant industry experience (only for vocational students). Please elaborate on the processes and skills you've acquired during your previous or ongoing degree program.

I believe discovering joy in learning encourages individuals to approach challenges with unconventional ideas and cultivate innovative solutions.
Hence
, medical school did not stop me from pursuing my passion. In the past two and half years, I have built a socio-health platform
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maintaining my 3.61 GPA. I am grateful because my platforms, Little Scientia and Healthy Higinia, allow me to resolve health-related social issues
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development directly. Various institutions appreciated my efforts, and I have been awarded funding grants four times. At Little Scientia, I lead a team that enhances children's critical thinking through a science-themed toy. With our recent sales growth, we have decided to organize a charity event for
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orphans called 'Science for Everyone' using our profits. I am
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the founder and Chief Operating Officer (COO) of Healthy Higinia, a healthy catering service. I oversee our operations, from the kitchen to the consumers, and
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the copywriter for our social media content. Keeping my GPA stable and actively participating in entrepreneurial platforms proves I am eager to learn new things. Other achievements I am blessed with are being awarded "The Best Pitch Deck" at Start (it) Up held by Farmasi Innovative Academy Universitas Gadjah Mada (UGM), and "The Best Start-Up" at Festival Karakter, one of the prestigious exhibition programs from Directorate of Students Affairs UGM. Despite my interest in entrepreneurship, I do a lot of voluntary work through an organization called
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for Indonesian Medical Students Activities (CIMSA). We try to decrease the number of high school smokers in Yogyakarta with our sustainable programs. We
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form a community development in the Posyandu (integrated health-care
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) at Sleman, Yogyakarta that assesses children's nutritional intake. All of these experiences enriched me with interdisciplinary learning skills. It
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gives me a sense of
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and increases my love for the areas I am studying both within and outside the campus. In the future, I want to trust myself more and attempt other multidisciplinary opportunities.
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