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Band 4.5

You have seen an advertisement from a couple who lives in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year Write a letter to the couple. In your letter 1)Explain why you think you would be suitable for the job 2)Say what else you could do for the family 3)Give your reasons for wanting the job Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses Begin your letter as follows Dear ………………….,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you letter because
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 opened education centre so I did advertisement in the internet. You were seeing my advertisement so
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 offer to my education centre. At the moment, the teachers are teaching different languages to children. I believe them because they are very good teachers. I teach children in the English language. My school has got an extra subject. They study possibly extra subjects.
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 has a lot of science. As an example, the children study math and abroad languages and here have different plays. I hope you will understand and you reply to my letter because
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 need pupils since
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. Yours faithfully Asadbek
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a central idea that is developed and expanded upon, rather than listing multiple unrelated points.
coherence cohesion
Use connectives and discourse markers to improve the flow of information and ideas throughout your letter.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task in your letter. You did not specifically explain why you think you'd be suitable, nor did you provide clear reasons for wanting the job.
coherence cohesion
Improve the structure of your letter by clearly identifying each task item in a separate paragraph with an introduction, development, and conclusion.
task achievement
Use a more consistent and appropriate tone for a job application letter. Avoid informal language and ensure formal politeness throughout.
coherence cohesion
Remember to proofread your letter for errors in grammar, spelling, and punctuation, which can impact the clarity of your communication.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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