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The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
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The line graph provides data about reasons causing
residents
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 from a city within a country to move.
Overall
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, one of the most common
reasonswas
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reasons was
reason was
due to
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 employment.
Whereas
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, adventure was the least excuse to move. In 2000, 60,000
residents
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 moved out of the city and the number of
people
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 continued to rise until the year 2010. For the next 5 years, there was a slight decrease.
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, the study was the second common reason. 25,000
people
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 moved out in the year 2000 but the numbers shockingly increased and reached the same endpoint as employment with over 89000
residents
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 increasing in 2015. Moving on, the bottom of the graph are the categories of family and friends,
as well as
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 adventure. Both excuses had the same amount of
people
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 moving which was over 10,000
people
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. In
the ongoing
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recent
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 years, the amount of
residents
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 leaving the city has risen to over 20,000
people
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. There was
also
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 a slight increase for adventure with only 15,000
residents
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 moving by the year 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words residents, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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