the diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans. Summaris the information by selectin and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
he
illustration below shows a Correct your spelling
The
water
treatment plant in an Australian city that filters and treats rain
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rainwater
water
to make it drinking water
.
Firstly
, rain
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rainwater
water
is collected from the roofs of houses by a pipe that drains it to the main pipe which links all the
four houses. After collection, it passes through a Correct article usage
apply
water
filter used to remove all the impurities such
as dust and other waste products and then
goes to a large container were
it is stored before it reaches the Correct your spelling
where
water
treatment tank.
From the storage place, filtered water
enters a narrow pipe and is collected in the treatment area which has bottles above the tank that release chemicals straight into the water
. These chemicals kill bacteria or other microorganisms and finally
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finally,
it
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they
passes
up to the tap Correct subject-verb agreement
pass
that is
located on the bottom of the first house were
people can access it.Correct your spelling
where
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